The new look

In terms of visual style I'm looking to combine POWERPUFF GIRLS, DEXTER'S LABORATORY (CARTOON NETWORK) and POTATOES AND DRAGONS (ABC)...


The dog's car.


The road to the sandwich's house.


The sandwich.


My usual illustrating style is a bit like this...


... but this is more appropriate for this piece.


The ROBOT policeman who can also transform into a motorbike.

The new and improved Sandwich story

The new story goes a little something like this...

A dog driving along in a car on a lonely highway, nearly runs over and picks up a sandwich whose car has broken down, and gives him and his piano a ride home. The sandwich lives alone in the Spooky mountains and when they arrive at the house offers the dog some dinner for his troubles. The dog declines at first, but his stomach is growling loudly so he stays for a meal. The sandwich seems very happy to have some company and fusses over him pedantically as if he’s never had a guest before, or doesn’t entertain guests very often.

Radio and TV news flashes report of an armed and dangerous sandwich on the loose last sighted heading for Spooky mountain ridge. Is this the sandwich the police are after? When alone for a moment, the dog makes a quick call to the police who race to the scene.

It appears as if the dog is being lined up as the sandwich’s next victim. The sandwich offers him some cake but as he approaches the dog, his shadow on the wall appears to be sneaking up to stab him. Is the dog’s mind playing tricks on him or is he really in trouble?

The police arrive in the nick of time and save the dog’s life. As the door is broken down by the police the sandwich is seen holding a revolver. There is a single shot fired but it’s not till the next day after the dog has left and the police robot is examining the scene that it’s evident that the sandwich was shot.

But it seems as if the police have made a mistake. A fact realised a little too late, as there is a dead sandwich lying on the floor, and the ‘dog’ is long gone. A few quick deductions and the discovery of the dogs collar on the floor near the piano reveal the truth.

The dog was actually an evil sandwich in disguise as a dog and he has escaped.

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I know this still sounds complicated by it's really much simpler than it sounds.

Practical solutions vs. complex ideas

I began drafting my scripts yesterday and I got past the very first part and it was already way too long. So I spent about 3 hours reworking it and it was still too long. So I cut out a lot of the details that I really wanted to put in. It was still too long. So I cut out everything that wasn't absolutely necessary to the plot development. It was still a little bit long, but it wasn't funny anymore and it was no longer the story I was trying to tell. I've concluded that my writing style to date, is well suited to movies or animations that are no less than 20 minutes in length. If I was to make the Island of Dr Sandwich, exactly how I see it, I would need about 6 months and a team of helper monkeys...

SO... After a serious reworking, my new concept has no time machines, no ninja monkeys, no helicopters, no suprise parties and no top secret briefings from the military. I'm glad to say that it DOES, however, have a criminally insane sandwich. It also has a piano, a futuristic hover car, a spooky looking haunted house in the mountains, a robot police officer who can transform into a motorbike and a TV news reporter... See, now that's much better!!!

Enter the sandwich

These are the first concept images of the Dr and the ninja...

The pitch

As a kid I would never have imagined that later on in my life I'd be sitting in a room of people discussing evil sandwiches and time machines. I guess there's a first time for everything, huh? I pitched my idea to my class and lecturers today. I think it went as well as can be expected.

I've been looking into villains and they're kind. I want to elude as to Dr Sandwich being an evil kind of guy, because he IS, but he's not an idiot, so of course he's going to PRETEND to not be evil. If I was going to take over the world tomorrow, and it was my birthday and a monkey ninja broke into my house and tried to kill me, I'd probably kill him, but this is a zero fatality cartoon, plus there's more potential to do something funnier by not killing him.

Dr Sandwich should also have a helicopter.